my first experience to write poem

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Hi every body
I whrit my first poem about my mother
I hope to says your opinion in this poem and tell me
when you found some mistakes

"my sweetie in my life"
One day I sit alone
No one in my home
The dark inter to my room
Suddenly I saw a light from my phone
*****
My phone rang and rang
This is my mother calling me
I feel happy about this thing
No one remember me
But she not forget me
*****
Oh my mum I love you
Oh my sweetie my hope in you
I love the soil which walk on it
And across the time your favor not forget
*****
Are you know you are my air which I breath
And the smile in my face
*****
Oooh my mum what can I do to respect you
I love you this says is not enough
*****
My mother tell me what I can do
To respect you I love you







your critisime make me in highe place and the comity kill my ability


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